Band 4+: Why do you want to stdy abroad?

Your pronunciation is average. It is understandable but not always accurate. Focusing on the rhythm and stress patterns of English could prove beneficial.

The answer addresses the topic of studying abroad and provides a reason (the desire to change parents' minds), but it lacks clarity and coherence. There is significant confusion in the middle section regarding specific names and roles, which makes the response difficult to follow and prevents it from being a direct answer to the 'why' aspect of the question. To improve, focus on providing clear, logical reasons for your motivation - such as academic quality, cultural exposure, or career opportunities - and ensure that the sentences flow logically without introducing contradictory or confusing information about your current status.

The response lacks logical progression and coherence. The connection between wanting to study abroad and being a 'Gary Porter' (which appears to be a transcription error or a non-sequitur) is unclear. The ideas jump from one point to another without smooth transitions. To improve, focus on using cohesive devices like 'Firstly,' 'Moreover,' or 'Because of this' to link your reasons for studying abroad to your current situation.

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There is significant confusion with word usage (e.g., 'fix his information' instead of 'change their minds'). The term 'Abroad University' is also unidiomatic; it is better to say 'a university abroad' or 'an international university.' Try to use more specific academic vocabulary such as 'cultural immersion,' 'global perspective,' or 'academic excellence' to explain your motivations.

There are several grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the Abroad University') and subject-verb agreement/pronoun usage ('my parents... fix his information'). The sentence structures are mostly simple and repetitive. To reach a higher band, practice using complex sentences (e.g., 'Although my parents are hesitant, I believe that studying abroad will benefit my career...') and ensure your pronouns match their antecedents (parents = their).