Band 6+: How do advertisements attract attention? Do young and old people show the same attitude towards them?

Your pronunciation is above average. However, you may find complexity in certain words challenging. Regular practice should aid in improvement.

The answer addresses both parts of the question, but the response to the second part is brief and could be more developed. The first part is explained with some relevant points (emotional appeal, celebrity endorsement), but the second part lacks elaboration and specific examples. To improve, provide more detailed explanations and examples for each point, and ensure a natural flow between ideas. Also, avoid abrupt transitions and incomplete sentences.

The answer is organized into two main parts, addressing both questions. However, the response lacks smooth transitions and cohesive devices, making it sound somewhat disjointed. The phrase 'Now I'm going to tell you about' is a bit informal and repetitive. To improve, use linking words like 'Firstly', 'In contrast', and 'Moreover' to connect ideas more smoothly. Also, avoid starting with 'Now' repeatedly.

The vocabulary is adequate but not highly precise or varied. Phrases like 'emotional appeal', 'celebrity endorsement', and 'social media advertisement' are appropriate, but there is room for more sophisticated and precise language. For example, instead of 'beneficial', you could say 'highly effective' or 'a powerful tool'. Also, the phrase 'raise children's awareness of husband and wife' is unclear and likely a misstatement; the refined version corrects it to 'health and safety', which makes more sense. Work on using more specific and accurate vocabulary.

There are several grammatical errors and awkward structures. For instance, 'how can attract attention advertisement' should be 'how advertisements can attract attention'. The sentence 'Which companies you celebrate to promote their products' is incorrect; it should be 'which companies use to promote their products'. Also, 'Now they have different attitudes' is vague; it should be 'Now, regarding the second question, young and old people have different attitudes'. The final sentence is grammatically correct but semantically unclear. To improve, focus on sentence structure and ensure subject-verb agreement and correct word order.