Band 4+: Tell me About your self

Your pronunciation is below average and may be understood with some effort. Pay attention to common phonemes that are challenging for you.

The response begins well by addressing the personal aspects of the question, such as name and family background. However, the middle section of the answer becomes incoherent and loses relevance to the topic. Phrases such as 'create a paper by diploma, form number, or get me into college' do not form logical sentences and do not contribute to a clear description of yourself. To improve, ensure that every sentence directly supports your description and maintains logical cohesion. Focus on describing your current occupation, your studies, or your interests to provide a well-rounded introduction.

The response lacks logical progression and coherence. While you attempt to introduce yourself, the transition from family members to 'creating a paper by diploma' is very abrupt and confusing. To improve, use cohesive devices (e.g., 'Regarding my family...', 'As for my background...') to link your ideas. Your ideas currently feel like a list of disconnected sentences rather than a flowing introduction.

There is significant misuse of vocabulary that obscures meaning. Phrases like 'fine member of my family' (instead of 'close-knit') and 'atomized, living' are used incorrectly in this context. You are attempting to use complex words, but they are not applied accurately. Focus on learning collocations (words that naturally go together), such as 'pursue a career' or 'close-knit family,' rather than trying to use high-level words in isolation.

The grammatical structures are often broken or incorrect, making it difficult to understand the intended meaning. For example, 'This name is Bajil by my father' and 'We can create a paper by diploma' are grammatically unsound. You need to work on basic sentence structures, particularly subject-verb agreement and the use of prepositions (e.g., 'call me by my nickname' instead of 'call me as my nickname').