Band 7+: What do you want to do when you leave school?

Your pronunciation is quite good. Working on consistency and tackling difficult sounds may enhance clarity.

The answer is directly on topic and provides a clear, natural response to the question. It includes a specific career goal (becoming a doctor/surgeon) and offers a brief but relevant elaboration, mentioning personal experiences and family background. To reach a higher band, you could add a bit more detail about why you are interested in this field or what steps you plan to take after leaving school, but the response is already well-developed and natural.

The answer is coherent and easy to follow, with a clear progression from leaving school to becoming a doctor and surgeon. There is some repetition ('become a doctor' mentioned twice) and a minor self-correction ('get started on my doctorate'), but these are not frequent. To improve, avoid repeating the same idea and use more varied cohesive devices to link ideas smoothly.

The vocabulary is appropriate and precise for the topic, with terms like 'doctorate', 'surgeon', and 'successful'. The phrase 'in all' is slightly informal and less precise than 'overall', which is used in the refined answer. To achieve a higher score, use more sophisticated and varied vocabulary, and ensure idiomatic expressions are used accurately.

The grammar is mostly accurate, with correct use of future tenses ('want to become', 'want to hopefully become') and complex structures. There is a minor error: 'all of my family's our doctors' should be 'all of my family are doctors' (as in the refined answer). The range of structures is adequate, but using more varied sentence patterns would enhance the score.