Band 5+: What should parents do if their child becomes very upset because of criticism from other people?

Your pronunciation is quite good. Working on consistency and tackling difficult sounds may enhance clarity.

The answer partially addresses the question by suggesting that parents should manage screen time and take children to peaceful places, which are relevant to handling upset from criticism. However, the response lacks a clear, direct focus on the specific issue of criticism and how to help the child cope emotionally. The ideas are somewhat vague and not fully developed, and the final sentence about support for success is tangential. To improve, the candidate should directly acknowledge the child's feelings, provide concrete strategies for dealing with criticism (e.g., discussing the criticism, building resilience, offering reassurance), and ensure all points clearly relate to the question.

The answer has a logical structure but lacks clear organization and cohesive devices. The ideas are presented in a somewhat disjointed manner, with frequent use of 'and also' and 'and' to connect thoughts. There is some repetition and self-correction, which affects fluency. To improve, use a clearer structure (e.g., first, second, finally) and more varied linking words like 'moreover', 'in addition', or 'furthermore'.

The vocabulary is adequate but not precise or flexible. Phrases like 'manage their screen time', 'look through their platforms', and 'peaceful places' are simple and somewhat vague. The phrase 'feel unwind' is incorrect; the refined version correctly uses 'feel relaxing'. To improve, use more specific and varied vocabulary, such as 'monitor their online activities', 'provide emotional support', or 'engage in calming activities'.

The grammar is mostly accurate but limited in range. The answer relies on simple sentence structures and has some errors, such as 'they should use in a good purpose' (should be 'use for a good purpose') and 'feel unwind' (should be 'feel relaxed'). There is also a run-on sentence with 'And maybe they just have it and also...'. To improve, use a wider range of structures, including complex sentences, and ensure accuracy in prepositions and verb forms.