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Band 4+: The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care their children in the evening in 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The image shows a graph depicting percentages of time spent by mothers, fathers, and both parents together on four activities: dressing, homework, playing games, and preparing for bed. Dressing: Mothers 75%, Fathers 10%, Both Parents together 15%. Homework: Mothers 40%, Fathers 10%, Both Parents together 50%. Playing games: Mothers 30%, Fathers 20%, Both Parents together 50%. Preparing for bed: Mothers 40%, Fathers 10%, Both Parents together 50%.

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The bar chart shows the information about the proportion of how parents in a country spent time paying attention to their children in the evening in the year 2022.

Overall, dressing with fathers experienced a downward trend,while dressing and other time spendings with mothers showed an upward trend. Although,time spendings with fathers initially had a lower rate.

Dressing, homeworks with mothers was about 75% and 50% in 2022,being higher than father’s rate. Fathers time spendings was around 3%,10%,5%,5% percents.That was a decline with comparing the mothers.However,they are all together rose significantly in playing games and preparing for bed.

In conclusion,the time spendings with mothers and both parents together showed a steady but significant rise over the period,while the percentage of fathers declined.

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spendings: 4

mothers: 3

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Task Response

The report identifies some main features but includes inaccuracies and generalizations. The organization is present but could be improved for clarity. To improve, focus on providing more specific data points and avoid overly general statements. Ensure accuracy in reporting the data and make clearer comparisons between the different categories. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

Coherence & Cohesion

The report demonstrates some attempt to organize the information, but the overall flow is disjointed. The 'overall' paragraph is vague and doesn't effectively summarize the key trends. The subsequent paragraph jumps between different activities and parent types without clear transitions. The conclusion is also quite general and doesn't provide a strong summary of the data. To improve coherence, focus on grouping related information together and using clear transition words and phrases to guide the reader. For example, dedicate separate paragraphs to each activity, comparing the time spent by mothers, fathers, and both parents together. Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and a logical flow of ideas.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary used is basic and lacks precision. There is some repetition of words like 'spendings' and 'time'. The report also contains some awkward phrasing, such as 'dressing with fathers experienced a downward trend' and 'fathers time spendings was around 3%,10%,5%,5% percents'. To improve lexical resource, try to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe the data and avoid repetition. Use a thesaurus to find synonyms for common words and phrases. Also, pay attention to the accuracy and naturalness of your word choices.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The report contains several grammatical errors, including incorrect verb tenses ('homeworks with mothers was'), subject-verb agreement issues ('fathers time spendings was'), and incorrect use of prepositions ('time paying attention to their children'). There are also issues with sentence structure and clarity. To improve grammatical range and accuracy, focus on mastering basic grammar rules and sentence structures. Proofread your work carefully to identify and correct errors. Consider using a grammar checker tool to help you identify areas for improvement.

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