The line graph illustrates the percentage of urban residents in the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia over a 70-year period from 1970 to 2040.
Overall, it is clear that the population living in cities increased in each country over the period shown. The Philippines had a much larger percentage of urban residents compared to the other nations, and both the Philippines and Indonesia experienced the fastest growth.
In 1970, the proportion of urban residents in the Philippines and Malaysia was about 30%. The figures for Thailand and Indonesia were lower, at approximately 15%. By 2040, the urban population of the Philippines is forecast to reach a peak of 80%, while the figures for Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia are expected to reach 55%, 50%, and 45%, respectively.
The Philippines and Indonesia will see a dramatic increase of around 50% by 2040. On the other hand, Malaysia and Thailand will maintain a steady increase.
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