Band 4+: The graph below shows snow depth (cm) at a particular ski resort in New Zealand in 2010 – 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The report attempts to address the task but contains significant inaccuracies and omissions. It misinterprets the data trends (e.g., stating Year One increased steadily when it actually fluctuated, and Year Two decreased in December when it actually increased). Key figures are incorrect (e.g., Year Two reaching 450cm in February, Year One declining in April, Year Three ending at 300cm). The report also omits specific data for several months and fails to make clear comparisons between years. To improve, focus on accurately describing the main trends, include specific data points, and make relevant comparisons. Ensure the overview is clear and supported by correct details. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a basic structure with an introduction and an overall statement, but the progression of ideas is often unclear and difficult to follow. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate (e.g., 'as for', 'then', 'but then'), and the lack of clear paragraphing and logical sequencing of data makes the message hard to grasp. To improve, organize the report into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific year or trend, and use a range of linking words and referencing to create a smooth flow. Ensure that each sentence logically connects to the next and that the overall summary is coherent.

The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, with several errors in word choice and spelling (e.g., 'resot' instead of 'resort', 'steadly' instead of 'steadily', 'scyrocketed' instead of 'skyrocketed', 'almostly' instead of 'almost'). There is an attempt to use some descriptive language (e.g., 'increased steadily', 'declined sharply'), but the range is narrow and the control is inconsistent. To improve, expand your vocabulary for describing trends (e.g., 'fluctuate', 'peak', 'plateau', 'gradual increase', 'sharp drop') and ensure correct spelling and word forms. Use precise and varied terms to avoid repetition and enhance clarity. Boost vocabulary complexity to elevate the overall score.

The report contains numerous grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that significantly impede understanding. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, verb tense consistency, and sentence structure (e.g., 'Year One increased steadly during whole period as Year Two' is unclear and grammatically incorrect). Punctuation is also problematic, with missing commas and run-on sentences. To improve, focus on writing clear, simple sentences with correct grammar, and then gradually incorporate more complex structures. Review basic grammar rules, such as verb tenses and prepositions, and practice writing sentences that are grammatically accurate and easy to understand.