Band 5+: The process diagram details the steps by which liquid chocolate is produced from cocoa beans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where

The report addresses the task by describing the main stages of the chocolate production process, from growing cocoa trees to pressing the beans to produce liquid chocolate. The overall structure is logical, and the key stages are covered. However, there are some inaccuracies and omissions: the report mentions 'crashed' instead of 'crushed' and incorrectly states 'outer shell removed' without specifying that the shell is removed after roasting. Additionally, the report omits the step of the beans being spread out in the sun before being placed in sacks, and it does not mention that the beans are fermented before drying. The language is generally clear, but there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'There given diagram', 'they opened', 'allow to dry'). To improve, ensure all main stages are accurately described and use more precise vocabulary and correct grammar. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a clear overall structure with an introduction, an overview, and a body that follows the sequence of the process. However, the flow is sometimes disrupted by abrupt transitions and missing logical connectors (e.g., 'After that, dried beans placed...' and 'Following this, after taking to factory beans are roasted...'). The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, which makes the message less effortless to follow. To improve, use a wider range of linking words and ensure each sentence clearly connects to the next, perhaps by using more varied sequencing phrases and ensuring subject-verb agreement for clarity.

The report uses some appropriate vocabulary related to the process (e.g., 'cultivate', 'harvest', 'ferment', 'transport', 'roast', 'press'), and there is an attempt to use less common words like 'culminate'. However, there are several spelling errors (e.g., 'procses', 'appropirate', 'crashed' instead of 'crushed', 'Finaly') and some awkward phrasing (e.g., 'they opened to remove', 'inner part pressed'). The range of vocabulary is adequate but not wide, and the control is not always accurate. To improve, proofread for spelling, use more precise verbs (e.g., 'crush' instead of 'crash'), and vary the vocabulary to avoid repetition (e.g., 'beans' is used repeatedly).

The report attempts to use a variety of sentence structures, including some complex sentences, but there are numerous grammatical errors that affect clarity. Examples include missing articles ('There given diagram' should be 'The given diagram'), incorrect verb forms ('they opened' should be 'they are opened'), missing passive voice ('dried beans placed' should be 'dried beans are placed'), and subject-verb agreement issues ('inner part pressed' should be 'the inner part is pressed'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and periods. To improve, focus on using the passive voice correctly for process descriptions, ensure subject-verb agreement, and proofread for basic grammar and punctuation errors.