Band 6+: You are moving out of a rented apartment where you have lived for several years. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter: tell the landlord that you are leaving thank them for their support during your stay explain what you liked most about living there

The letter addresses all three bullet points: it explains the reason for moving out (family bereavement and need to be closer to family), describes how the apartment will be left in good condition (taking photos, paying for damages), and requests the deposit return. The tone is appropriate and the purpose is clear. However, there are some lapses in clarity and formality: 'aware you' should be 'inform you', 'change an inhabit' is awkward, 'swift checking out' is informal, and 'landlord's deposit' is confusing (it should be 'my deposit'). The phrase 'I may leave some of my furnishings' is irrelevant and could raise concerns. To improve, use more precise and formal language, avoid irrelevant details, and clearly state that you will return the apartment in its original condition. The letter falls short of the required 150 words.

The letter is logically organized with clear paragraphs for each required point. However, the flow is somewhat abrupt, especially the transition from the reason for moving to the apartment condition. The use of cohesive devices is limited, and some sentences feel disconnected. To improve, use linking phrases such as 'In addition' or 'Furthermore' to connect ideas smoothly, and ensure each paragraph has a clear central topic.

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, with some attempts at formal language (e.g., 'sincerely grateful', 'at your earliest convenience'). However, there are several awkward or incorrect word choices (e.g., 'aware you' instead of 'inform you', 'change an inhabit' instead of 'relocate', 'swift checking out' instead of 'quick move-out', 'estate' instead of 'property', 'means' instead of 'money'). To improve, use more precise and natural vocabulary, and avoid literal translations. Also, vary word choice to avoid repetition (e.g., 'apartment' and 'property').

The letter contains a range of sentence structures, but there are several grammatical errors that affect clarity. Examples include: 'I am writing to aware you' (should be 'to inform you'), 'I am willing to change an inhabit' (should be 'I intend to move'), 'accidentely' (spelling error), 'I may leave some of my furnishings' (awkward phrasing), and 'I want to request to return my landlord's deposit' (should be 'I request the return of my deposit'). Punctuation is mostly correct, but some sentences are run-ons or lack proper connectors. To improve, proofread carefully and practice using complex sentences with accurate grammar.