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Band 5+: You recently noticed a local restaurant that was offering a part-time job. Write a letter to the restaurant's manager. In your letter, explain that you would like to apply for the job give some details of any relevant experience that you have specify the days and times that would suit you

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Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this to express my interest in the opening of part time Waitstaff at your restaurant. I would like to apply this opportunity and please find my attached resume.

At present, I am Studying masters degree at AHS university. It would be helpful if I have a income to balance expenses between course fee and other personal expenses.

Moreover, I have previous 6 months of experience in handling food services and I awarded good employee in the second month itself. I can assure you that, I would be able to handle the service smoothly and efficiently. Additionally, I have two wheeler license, so that home delivery services also cover.

My classes will finish by 2 pm and I would be available from 3pm to 10 pm during weekdays and whole day during weekends. Requesting you to review my resume and provide your response at earliest, So that I can plan accordingly.

I am Looking forward your reply soon.

Yours faithfully,

Radhika

Word Count: 167

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B2 - Upper Intermediate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

would: 4

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Task Response

The letter addresses all three required points: why you want to work there (to balance expenses), previous experience (6 months in food service), and schedule/availability (weekdays from 3pm to 10pm, weekends all day). The tone is appropriate for a job application. However, there are some minor lapses: the opening could be more natural (e.g., 'I am writing to apply for the part-time waitstaff position'), and the phrase 'I awarded good employee' should be 'I was awarded Employee of the Month' or similar. Additionally, mentioning a two-wheeler license for delivery is slightly off-topic as the job is for waitstaff, not delivery. To improve, ensure all details directly relate to the role applied for and polish the language for clarity and professionalism.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter is generally easy to follow, but there are some lapses in coherence and cohesion. The flow could be improved by using clearer linking words and structuring the paragraphs more logically. For example, the transition from discussing your studies to your experience is abrupt. Consider using phrases like 'In addition to my studies' or 'Furthermore' to connect ideas smoothly. The paragraphing is acceptable but could be more skillfully managed to separate different points (e.g., motivation, experience, availability).

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, but there is room for improvement in range and precision. Some phrases are awkward or informal, such as 'I awarded good employee' (should be 'I was awarded' or 'I received an award for being a good employee') and 'two wheeler license' (more naturally 'motorcycle license' or 'two-wheeler driving license'). Using more varied and sophisticated vocabulary, such as 'eager to contribute' instead of 'would be able to handle', would enhance the letter. The overall lexical control is satisfactory but not fully natural or sophisticated.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

There are several grammatical errors and punctuation issues that affect clarity. Examples include: 'I am Studying masters degree' (should be 'I am studying for a master's degree'), 'if I have a income' (should be 'if I have an income'), 'I awarded good employee' (should be 'I was awarded good employee' or 'I was recognized as a good employee'), and 'Requesting you to review' (should be 'I request you to review'). The sentence 'So that home delivery services also cover' is incomplete and unclear. A wider range of sentence structures is needed, and punctuation, such as commas and capitalization, should be used more accurately. The errors are noticeable and sometimes impede understanding.

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