Band 5+: Describe a time when you felt proud of a family member

Your pronunciation is above average. However, you may find complexity in certain words challenging. Regular practice should aid in improvement.

The response addresses the topic and identifies a specific family member and the reason for the pride felt. However, the development of the answer is somewhat limited. To improve, aim to expand on the specific details of the event. For example, you could describe the content of the book, the specific nature of the setbacks she faced, or the exact emotions you felt during the book introduction. Providing more descriptive language and connecting the ideas with more complex cohesive devices would help in providing a more thorough and fluent response. The response could be expanded as it currently feels quite brief.

The speaker manages to convey the basic narrative, but the flow is highly fragmented. There is significant repetition of sentence structures (e.g., starting multiple sentences with 'She...') and a lack of sophisticated cohesive devices. To improve, use more complex linking words such as 'Despite the challenges,' 'Not only did she write it, but she also...', or 'Looking back, I realize...'. The connection between the book and the physical rehabilitation was also quite abrupt and difficult to follow logically.

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive (using 'proud', 'created', and 'she' multiple times). In the raw transcript, there were several instances of word misuse or confusion, such as 'she was mobility' instead of 'resilient' or 'mobile', and 'chains' which seemed to be a transcription error for something else. To reach a higher band, you need to use more precise academic or descriptive vocabulary. Instead of 'she was so happy', try 'she was immensely gratified' or 'she felt a sense of accomplishment'. Instead of 'setback', try 'adversity' or 'obstacles'.

The grammar is characterized by short, simple sentences. There is a lack of complex sentence structures (subordinate clauses, relative clauses, etc.). There were also significant grammatical errors in the raw version, such as 'She wasted her time on the way was a lot of setback' and 'after unfortunately chains'. Even in the refined version, the grammar remains quite basic. Aim to use a variety of tenses (Past Perfect for background events, e.g., 'She had faced many setbacks before she finally published...') and conditional structures to demonstrate range.