Band 4+: when do people like to give jewellery in your country and why?

Your pronunciation is average. It is understandable but not always accurate. Focusing on the rhythm and stress patterns of English could prove beneficial.

The answer directly addresses the question and provides relevant examples of occasions. However, the response is quite brief. To improve, try to elaborate on the 'why' part of the question. For instance, you could explain the cultural significance of jewelry during weddings or why it is a preferred gift for birthdays. Expanding on your ideas will help demonstrate a higher level of fluency and communicative ability. The response could be expanded as it currently feels quite brief.

The answer is very brief and lacks development. While you attempted to list occasions, the flow is fragmented. To improve, you should use cohesive devices (e.g., 'First of all,' 'Additionally,' 'For instance') and expand on your reasons to explain *why* these occasions are significant, as requested by the question.

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive (e.g., using 'party time' multiple times). You also struggled to express the concept of 'occasions' or 'traditions' clearly. Try to use more specific collocations such as 'special occasions,' 'milestone celebrations,' or 'traditional gifts' to boost your score.

There are significant grammatical errors that impede communication. Phrases like 'people giving to get to natural way' are structurally incorrect and difficult to understand. You should focus on mastering basic sentence structures (Subject + Verb + Object) and the correct use of prepositions (e.g., 'during weddings' instead of 'some wedding').