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Band 7+: All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor. Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter · give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience · explain what help you hope your mentor can give · suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

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Dear Mr. Anderson,

I hope this letter finds you well. My name is Nikita Khanna, and I just joined your firm last week for a role of construction estimator.

To provide you with my educational qualifications and work experience, my background is in civil engineering, and I have completed additional two years diploma in civil engineering technician from the McMaster University in Canada. Additionally, I have three years of work experience working as a junior estimator in the construction company.

I am seeking your support because, as per our company policy, I can get assistance during my initial period to get familiar myself with the working environment. Although I am confident enough to use my previous skills, I may require a list of upcoming projects to start working on. In addition to this, are there any particular job duties outside of my role which the management is expecting?

Therefore, I suggest a brief discussion of all matters in a meeting. If it is possible for you, I would like to meet you tomorrow in the boardroom, sharp at 10 a.m. Let me know if it works best for you, or is there any other preferable timing.

Thank you in advance, and I look forward to gain valuable knowledge from you.

Yours sincerely,

Nikita Khanna

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Vocabulary Complexity:
C1 - Intricate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

working: 3

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Task Response

The letter effectively addresses all three bullet points: it provides a clear outline of your studies and work experience, explains the specific help you need, and proposes a meeting arrangement. The tone is polite and professional, and the content is relevant and sufficient. Minor lapses include a few grammatical inaccuracies (e.g., 'to get familiar myself' should be 'to familiarize myself', 'I look forward to gain' should be 'I look forward to gaining') and a slightly informal phrase ('sharp at 10 a.m.'). To improve, ensure grammatical precision and maintain a consistently formal tone throughout.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter is logically organized and easy to follow, with clear paragraphs for each bullet point. However, some transitions could be smoother, and the final sentence 'I look forward to gain valuable knowledge' is slightly awkward. Consider using more cohesive devices to link ideas, such as 'In addition' or 'Furthermore', and ensure each paragraph flows naturally into the next.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is appropriate and generally accurate, with some good use of formal language (e.g., 'I hope this letter finds you well', 'I am seeking your support'). However, there are a few imprecise word choices and phrases, such as 'a role of construction estimator' (should be 'a role as a construction estimator') and 'get familiar myself' (should be 'familiarize myself'). To improve, use more varied and precise vocabulary, and avoid repetition (e.g., 'work experience' appears twice).

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter demonstrates a reasonable range of grammatical structures, but there are several errors that affect clarity. For example, 'I have completed additional two years diploma' should be 'I have completed an additional two-year diploma', and 'I look forward to gain' should be 'I look forward to gaining'. Also, 'Let me know if it works best for you, or is there any other preferable timing' is a bit awkward; consider rephrasing to 'Let me know if this time works for you, or if you would prefer a different time.' Overall, with more attention to grammar and punctuation, the accuracy can be improved.

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