Band 5+: It is ten years since you left college. You'd like to organise an event to celebrate this anniversary with all your friends and classmates from college. Write a letter to one of your college friends. In your letter • say what kind of celebration event you'd like to organise • explain why you think it would be good to celebrate in this way • describe what help you need to organise this event

The letter addresses all three bullet points, but the development of the ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention the type of event (outdoor restaurant), the reason for celebrating in this specific way is a bit vague (it focuses more on the surprise element than the benefit of the celebration itself). The request for help is clear, but the scope of the event feels very small (mentioning only 5 people), which slightly contradicts the prompt's implication of celebrating with 'all' classmates. To improve, try to expand more on the 'why' - for example, mentioning the desire to reconnect or reminisce about old times. Additionally, ensure that your ideas flow more logically; the transition between the event description and the request for help could be smoother. Work on grammatical accuracy, particularly with verb tenses and word forms (e.g., 'participated' vs 'participate', 'confuse' vs 'confusion'), to ensure your meaning is always clear.

The letter follows the required structure by addressing the three bullet points, but the flow of ideas is somewhat disjointed. The transition between the event description and the request for help is abrupt. To improve, use more cohesive devices (e.g., 'Regarding the organization,' or 'In terms of help') to link your paragraphs. Additionally, ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic to help the reader follow your logic more easily.

The vocabulary used is basic and contains several spelling errors (e.g., 'writting', 'surprice', 'confuse', 'classamtes'). There are also instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'be participated to this event' and 'any kind of confuse'. To reach a higher band, aim for more precise word choices and ensure that spelling is accurate. Try to use more natural collocations, such as 'organize a reunion' instead of 'set up a celebration day'.

Grammatical errors are frequent and occasionally impede the reader's understanding. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('non of us has been there'), incorrect preposition usage, and sentence structure errors (e.g., 'when would be a hot summer day'). There are also punctuation errors, such as the use of a semicolon in 'can;t'. Focus on mastering basic sentence structures and proofreading your work to catch errors in verb tense and noun-pronoun agreement.