Band 4+: The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The report attempts to address the task by describing the bar chart data for male smokers in 2000 and 2015 across several countries and the world average. However, there are some inaccuracies in the data (e.g., Armenia's 2000 figure is given as 67% instead of 73%, and Cuba's 2000 figure is 54% instead of 60%) and the report misinterprets the subject as 'teenagers' rather than 'adult male smokers,' which is a key inaccuracy. The overall structure is present, with an overview and comparisons, but the inclusion of incorrect data and the misinterpretation of the target group detract from the task achievement. To improve, ensure the data is accurately reported and that the description matches the task prompt exactly. Additionally, avoid vague phrases like 'the most higher' and use more precise language for comparisons. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a basic structure with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. However, the flow is disrupted by unclear referencing and awkward phrasing. The overview is somewhat vague and does not clearly highlight the key trends. The body paragraphs present data but lack smooth transitions and logical progression. To improve, use clearer topic sentences, ensure each paragraph focuses on a distinct aspect (e.g., highest and lowest values, changes over time), and employ cohesive devices like 'in contrast', 'similarly', or 'notably' to link ideas more effectively.

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with several inaccuracies and inappropriate word choices (e.g., 'teenangers', 'ciggerates', 'generation smoker', 'accumulated'). There is an over-reliance on basic terms like 'higher', 'lowest', and 'proportion'. To improve, use a wider range of precise and topic-specific vocabulary (e.g., 'prevalence', 'decline', 'accounted for', 'followed by', 'respectively'). Avoid informal or incorrect terms and ensure correct spelling and collocations.

The report contains frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('Armenia and Bangladesh was'), incorrect verb forms ('who used to be smoker', 'population that be smoker'), and missing articles ('proportion of teenangers'). Sentence structures are mostly simple and sometimes incomplete. To improve, practice using a variety of sentence types (complex, compound) and ensure subject-verb agreement, correct tense usage, and proper article use. Proofreading for basic errors is essential.