Band 4+: The diagram below shows how jeans are made from cotton. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The report generally addresses the task by describing the main stages of the jeans manufacturing process. However, there are some inaccuracies and omissions that detract from the overall clarity. For instance, the mention of 'frozen' is not supported by the visual description, and the sequence of washing, bleaching, dyeing, and spinning is not accurately represented. Additionally, the report omits the specific details about the textile factory weaving the yarn into denim, and the final distribution to the USA and Europe is only vaguely mentioned as 'transported to a store.' To improve, ensure all key stages are accurately described in the correct order, and avoid introducing unsupported details. Focus on clearly presenting the main features and making relevant comparisons where appropriate. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a clear overall structure with an introduction and a general overview. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes unclear, and the use of cohesive devices is limited. For example, the phrase 'Upon arrival, it is frozen' is confusing and disrupts the flow. To improve, use a wider range of linking words and phrases (e.g., 'subsequently', 'in the next stage', 'following this') and ensure each paragraph focuses on a distinct stage of the process. The paragraphing could be more effectively managed to group related steps together.

The report uses some appropriate vocabulary related to the manufacturing process (e.g., 'delineates', 'harvested', 'spun into yarn'). However, there are several inaccuracies and awkward phrasings, such as 'it is got denum cut' and 'button and zips added'. The range of vocabulary is limited, and some terms are used incorrectly (e.g., 'frozen' instead of 'processed'). To improve, use more precise and varied vocabulary, and ensure that technical terms are used correctly. Avoid repetition of 'final product' and consider using synonyms like 'end product' or 'finished goods'.

The report demonstrates some control of grammar, but there are several errors that affect clarity. For example, 'This fibre subsequently undergo' should be 'undergoes', and 'it is got denum cut' is grammatically incorrect. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some run-on sentences. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, use a wider range of sentence structures (e.g., passive voice, relative clauses), and ensure that each sentence is grammatically complete. Proofreading for common errors would significantly enhance the accuracy.