Band 4+: The diagram below shows how one type of desert, known as a rain-shadow desert, is formed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The report addresses the task by describing the formation process of rain-shadow deserts, but it contains some inaccuracies and awkward phrasing that detract from clarity. The overall structure is present, with an overview and step-by-step description, but the language is imprecise in places (e.g., 'form progress', 'an upward trend', 'the rain was dry in air'). To improve, focus on using accurate and natural vocabulary to describe the sequence, such as 'moist air rises and cools' instead of 'experiences an increase level'. Also, ensure that comparisons between the windward and leeward sides are clearly stated. The word count is sufficient, but the report would benefit from more precise data reporting and smoother transitions between steps. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report attempts to describe the process but lacks a clear and logical flow. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate (e.g., 'it depicts an upward trend' is unclear). Paragraphing is not effectively managed, and the overall structure could be improved to make the sequence of steps easier to follow. To improve, focus on using a clear chronological order and appropriate linking words (e.g., 'firstly', 'then', 'after that', 'finally') to guide the reader through the process.

The vocabulary used is somewhat limited and repetitive. There are attempts to use more sophisticated terms (e.g., 'depicts', 'experiences'), but these are often used incorrectly or inappropriately. The phrasing 'form progress' and 'dried air is change' shows a lack of precision. To improve, expand your range of topic-specific vocabulary (e.g., 'moisture-laden air', 'condensation', 'precipitation', 'arid conditions') and ensure words are used accurately in context.

The report contains several grammatical errors and awkward constructions that affect clarity. Issues include incorrect verb forms ('is change'), subject-verb agreement ('winds blow... it depicts'), and incomplete sentences ('providing only natural phenomenon with 7 steps'). Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, practice using a variety of sentence structures (simple, compound, complex) and review basic grammar rules, especially verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. Proofreading for errors before finalizing the report is essential.