Band 4+: The diagram below shows how soft cheese is made. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The report addresses the task by describing the main stages of the soft cheese production process. It provides an overall view and mentions key steps such as mixing, cooling, fermentation, heating, evaporation, and final cooling. However, there are some inaccuracies and omissions: the addition of salt is not mentioned, the filtering stage is omitted, and the description of the evaporation process is somewhat unclear. Additionally, the report lacks clear comparisons or a more structured overview of the sequence. To improve, ensure all main stages are covered accurately and use clearer sequencing language (e.g., 'then', 'after that', 'finally') to enhance coherence. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a logical structure with an introduction and an overall statement, but the sequence of steps is not always clear and some stages are omitted or merged. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate (e.g., 'Later, in evaporation process...'). Paragraphing is not effectively managed, as the entire description is presented in a single block. To improve, organize the process into clear paragraphs, use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'following this', 'subsequently', 'at the next stage'), and ensure each step is presented in a logical order.

The vocabulary is adequate for describing a process, but it is limited and repetitive. There are some inaccuracies in word choice and phrasing (e.g., 'there is collected water and milk', 'it has emissions with steam', 'where there included a waste water'). To achieve a higher score, use a wider range of precise and natural vocabulary, such as 'the mixture is subjected to fermentation', 'steam is released', 'the product is then cooled', and 'waste water is produced'. Avoid informal or incorrect expressions.

The report contains numerous grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and word order (e.g., 'it has been cooled only two hours by 5C', 'the combine of water and milk being heated in 100 temperature'). The use of passive voice is inconsistent. To improve, focus on using a range of sentence structures accurately, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use the passive voice consistently to describe processes. Proofreading for punctuation and article usage is also recommended.