Band 4+: the diagram below shows the production of olive oil. Write a report for a University lecturer describing this information

The report addresses the task by describing the main stages of olive oil production, but it contains some inaccuracies and omissions. For instance, the order of rinsing and transporting is slightly confused, and the separation of stones is not clearly linked to the smashing stage. The final stage is described adequately, but the language is often unclear and contains grammatical errors that affect clarity. To improve, ensure each stage is described accurately and in the correct sequence, and use clearer, more precise language. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a logical structure with an introduction, an overview, and a sequential description of the process. However, the flow is disrupted by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, making it difficult to follow at times. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate (e.g., 'After this picked up olive sent to...'). Paragraphing is not effectively managed, as the entire description is presented in a single paragraph. To improve, consider using clearer topic sentences, more varied linking words (e.g., 'subsequently', 'following this', 'in the final stage'), and ensuring each stage is clearly connected to the next.

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with some appropriate terms such as 'rinsing', 'smashing', 'pressing', and 'separating'. However, there are several inaccuracies and awkward choices (e.g., 'picking up fresh, good quality olive' should be 'picking fresh, high-quality olives'; 'deliver storages' should be 'deliver to stores'; 'places to bag' should be 'placed in bags'). The range of vocabulary is limited, and there is repetition of basic words like 'olive' and 'oil'. To improve, use more precise and varied vocabulary (e.g., 'harvesting', 'crushing', 'extraction', 'bottling') and ensure correct collocations.

The report contains numerous grammatical errors that significantly affect clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'olive sent' should be 'olives are sent'), missing articles (e.g., 'production of olive oil' should be 'the production of olive oil'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'culminating with to prepare' should be 'culminating in the preparation'), and incomplete sentences (e.g., 'Then olive stones separate from smashing' is unclear). Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on using correct tense (present simple passive is often appropriate for processes), ensuring subject-verb agreement, and constructing complete, grammatically correct sentences. Practicing with model reports and reviewing basic grammar rules would be beneficial.