Band 4+: The diagram shows the process of making wool. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The report addresses the task by describing the main stages of the wool production process, but it contains some inaccuracies and omissions. For example, it mentions '12 stages' without clear justification, and the description of the process is somewhat vague and lacks specific details from the diagram. The report also fails to make comparisons or highlight key features clearly. To improve, focus on accurately describing each stage in sequence, include all relevant steps (e.g., recycling, tuft storage, and the final products), and ensure the overview is clear and supported by specific details from the diagram. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a clear overall structure with an introduction and an overview, but the body paragraphs lack logical progression and clear paragraphing. The sequence of stages is not always easy to follow, and some connections between steps are missing or unclear (e.g., the relationship between spinning, recycling, and the production of wool/tufts). The use of cohesive devices is limited, and some sentences are abrupt, making the message harder to follow. To improve, organize the process into clear stages and use a range of linking words (e.g., 'after which', 'subsequently', 'while') to show the sequence and any branching or alternative paths.

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but limited in range and precision. Some terms are used inaccurately (e.g., 'correct strings' instead of 'spun strings' or 'yarn', 'tufted wool' instead of 'tufts of wool'). There is some attempt to use process-related vocabulary (e.g., 'sheared', 'cleaned', 'dried', 'spinning', 'knit'), but the range is narrow and lacks sophistication. To improve, use a wider variety of precise terms (e.g., 'raw wool', 'fibres', 'spun into yarn', 'woven/knitted into garments') and avoid vague or incorrect phrasing. Boost vocabulary complexity to elevate the overall score.

The report contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity and accuracy. There are subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'The process are', 'Dried wool are'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'after give strings'), and missing articles or prepositions. Sentence structures are mostly simple and repetitive, with limited use of complex forms. Punctuation is generally correct, but the errors are frequent enough to distract the reader. To improve, review basic grammar rules (subject-verb agreement, verb tenses, articles) and practice using a variety of sentence structures, such as passive voice and relative clauses, which are common in process descriptions.