Band 4+: The picture below show how tomato ketchup is made. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The report addresses the task by describing the main stages of the ketchup-making process, but it contains several inaccuracies and omissions. For example, it incorrectly states that tomatoes are sent to 'cooking' instead of the factory, and it omits the step of passing through a filter. Additionally, the sequence of steps is not entirely accurate (e.g., labeling before quality control is correct, but the description of 'poured into boils' is unclear and likely a typo). The report also includes some irrelevant or imprecise details, such as 'sorted good and bad ones' without specifying that this happens before delivery. To improve, ensure all key stages are covered in the correct order, use precise vocabulary, and avoid vague or incorrect descriptions. Overall, the response is on topic but has notable lapses in accuracy and completeness. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a logical structure with an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs, but the flow is disrupted by unclear sequencing and abrupt transitions. The overview mentions 6 main stages, but the body does not clearly delineate these stages, and the use of 'FIRSTLY', 'SECONDLY', 'LATER' is inconsistent. The paragraphing is not skilfully managed, and some steps are described in a confusing order (e.g., 'poured into boils' before labelling). To improve, use clear cohesive devices (e.g., 'after that', 'subsequently') and ensure each paragraph focuses on a distinct stage of the process.

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with some inaccuracies (e.g., 'staffs' instead of 'staff', 'cooking' instead of 'factory', 'boils' instead of 'bottles', 'kutcheps' instead of 'ketchup'). There is limited use of precise or sophisticated terms, such as 'sorting', 'crushing', 'filtering', or 'quality control'. To improve, expand your range of vocabulary related to processes and use more precise nouns and verbs. Avoid informal or incorrect terms and ensure correct spelling.

The report contains numerous grammatical errors and punctuation issues that affect clarity. There are subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'staffs collected' should be 'staff collected'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'were sent' vs. 'are sent'), and missing articles (e.g., 'the tomatoes'). Punctuation is inconsistent, with overuse of capital letters and missing commas. The range of grammatical structures is limited, with mostly simple sentences. To improve, practice using a variety of sentence structures, ensure subject-verb agreement, and proofread for punctuation and spelling errors.