Band 4+: The line graph below shows the number of students enrolled in three different academic majors from 2010 to 2020.

The report addresses the main trends shown in the graph, noting the increase in Engineering and the decreases in Business and Arts. However, there are several inaccuracies in the data (e.g., Engineering starting at 150 instead of ~120, Business starting at 150 instead of ~220) and some unclear phrasing (e.g., 'lot more than', 'keeps growing trough'). The structure could be improved by organizing the information more clearly, perhaps by dedicating a paragraph to each major or grouping similar trends. Additionally, avoid informal language and ensure correct spelling and grammar (e.g., 'which' instead of 'wich', 'through' instead of 'trough'). Focus on presenting the key features accurately and concisely. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report attempts to describe the trends but lacks a clear overall structure. The information is presented in a somewhat disjointed manner, with ideas not always logically connected. Paragraphing is not effectively used, and the flow from one sentence to the next could be smoother. To improve, consider organizing the report into clear paragraphs: one for an overview of the main trends, and then separate paragraphs for each major or for contrasting trends. Use cohesive devices such as 'in contrast', 'similarly', and 'while' to link ideas more effectively.

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive (e.g., 'goes down', 'gets less'). There is limited range and some inappropriate word choices (e.g., 'sections' instead of 'majors' or 'departments'). To achieve a higher score, aim to use a wider variety of precise and academic vocabulary, such as 'enrolment', 'decline', 'increase', 'peak', 'fluctuate', and 'stabilize'. Also, avoid informal phrasing like 'a lot more' and use more formal alternatives like 'significantly higher'.

The report contains numerous grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement errors ('students who choose... is'), incorrect verb forms ('is keeps growing'), and misspellings ('wich', 'trough'). Sentence structures are often fragmented or run-on. To improve, focus on constructing grammatically correct sentences with a mix of simple and complex structures. Proofread carefully to eliminate basic errors. Practice using relative clauses, conditional structures, and passive voice appropriately.