Band 4+: The pie chart below shows the percentage of total energy consumption by different sources in a country in 2023. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Energy Consumption by Source in a Country, 2023

The report addresses the task by presenting the main features of the pie chart and making some comparisons. However, there are several issues that affect clarity and accuracy. The language is often unclear or grammatically incorrect (e.g., 'oil were highest 31%', 'at that movement'), and some phrases are repetitive or awkward. Additionally, the report includes minor inaccuracies (e.g., 'renewable energy (other) (8%)' is presented without a clear verb, and the phrasing 'coal fell to 25%' implies a change over time, which is not shown in the chart). To improve, focus on using precise and varied vocabulary, ensuring grammatical accuracy, and structuring the information more logically. Also, avoid unnecessary repetition and ensure all data points are clearly and correctly reported. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a clear overall structure with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs, but the flow is disrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear referencing. The overview is present but could be more concise and better integrated. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate (e.g., 'at that movement', 'In terms of the remaining pie chart'). Paragraphing is attempted but not consistently logical, and some sentences are repetitive. To improve, focus on creating a smoother logical progression, using a wider range of linking words accurately, and ensuring each paragraph has a clear central idea.

The report uses some appropriate vocabulary for describing data (e.g., 'proportion', 'accounts for', 'portion'), but the range is limited and there are several inaccuracies and awkward expressions (e.g., 'oil were highest', 'fell to 25% at that movement', 'hydroelecteic power'). The phrasing is often not natural or precise, and there is repetition of 'Global Energy Consumption by Source'. To improve, expand your range of descriptive language (e.g., 'constituted', 'represented', 'accounted for'), use precise terms for comparisons, and avoid informal or incorrect expressions. Aim for more sophisticated and natural control of vocabulary.

The report contains numerous grammatical errors that affect clarity and accuracy. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'natural gas were', 'nuclear energy were'), incorrect word forms (e.g., 'hydroelecteic'), and incomplete or awkward sentence structures (e.g., 'the Global Energy Consumption by Source in 2023 oil were highest 31%'). Punctuation is also inconsistent. While some simple structures are used correctly, the range is limited and errors are frequent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for spelling and punctuation. Practice using a variety of complex structures accurately.