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Band 6+: you are going to another country to study you would like to do part time job while you are studying so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. wrie a letter to this friend give details of your study plans esplain why you want to get a part time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job

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Dear Sam,

What’s cracking, pal? I hope you’re doing well! I am writing this epistle to seek your assistance for finding part-time work in your nation because I am coming over there for my higher study. I have applied for two years Supply Chain Mangement diploma at CDI college. My study is going to begin in September 2026.

Given the situation, I’d love to apply for part time job in conjunction with my study, as my course schedule from Monday to Wedneday and I’m available on the weekends. The job will be helpful to arrange my living and grocery expenses. In this way, I’ll save my GIC funds for future course fees.

Moreover, I’d like to ask about the websites where I can apply for part-time positions in advance. If you have reference at your work, I’ll be happy to join there after reaching. Please let me know the contact number of reputative hiring agencies, which help to find work in your areas.

I look forward to hearing your prompt response.

Best regards,

Mannu

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Overall Band Score

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B1 - Intermediate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

study: 3

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Task Response

The letter addresses all three prompts from the task effectively. You have clearly outlined your study plan, provided a logical reason for seeking employment, and offered specific ways your friend could assist. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, though there is a slight inconsistency between the very casual opening ('What's cracking, pal?') and the overly formal use of the word 'epistle'. To improve, ensure the vocabulary remains consistent in register. Additionally, minor grammatical errors (e.g., 'reputative' instead of 'reputable' and 'my course schedule from Monday to Wedneday' which lacks a verb) should be corrected to ensure smoother flow. Overall, the task requirements are met sufficiently.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter follows a logical structure, addressing all three bullet points from the task. However, the transitions between ideas could be smoother. Some sentences feel slightly disconnected, particularly when moving from the study plan to the reasons for working. To improve, use more natural cohesive devices and ensure that each paragraph flows logically into the next. For example, instead of starting a paragraph with 'Given the situation,' try to link the need for work more directly to the upcoming studies.

Lexical Resource

There is an attempt to use varied vocabulary (e.g., 'epistle', 'in conjunction with'), but some word choices are inappropriate for the context. 'Epistle' is far too formal for a letter to a friend, and 'your nation' sounds overly clinical for an informal message. Additionally, there are spelling errors such as 'Mangement' and 'reputative' (which should be 'reputable'). Aim for a consistent tone; since you started with 'What's cracking, pal?', the rest of the letter should maintain a friendly, informal, yet natural tone without using archaic or overly formal words.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains several grammatical errors that occasionally hinder clarity. Issues include missing articles (e.g., 'apply for part time job' should be 'apply for a part-time job'), incorrect preposition usage ('assistance for finding' should be 'assistance in finding'), and incomplete sentence structures ('as my course schedule from Monday to Wedneday'). There are also issues with verb tense and phrasing (e.g., 'after reaching' should be 'after I arrive'). To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, the correct use of articles, and ensuring that every sentence has a complete predicate.

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