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Band 5+: You are looking for a part-time job at a football club. Write a letter in about 150-200 words to the manager of the football club. Your email should do the following things: Introduce yourself Explain what experience and special skills you have Tell him/her when you think you could start.

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Dear Hiring Manager,

I am writing this letter with regard in response to an advertisement posted by you on Facebook. My name is Peter Dsouza. I have a Bachelor’s degree in Health and Physical education. Currently, I am coaching a group of school students for the upcoming football tournament. In the evening, I am volunteering my services for street players who cannot join any football club or sports academy.

Additionally, I myself the winner of several prizes, medals and certificates in football tournaments which were held in last five years on provincial level. Moreover, I have been working in this field since last 10 years. Now I can understand well the tips and techniques of this game. Furthermore, I can speak 2 other languages which also can help to communicate with students.

In this prospect, I am available for an interview on July21, 2026. If I am selected for the post, I can join immediately. Feel free to ask any question. I am looking forward to hear from you.

Yours Faithfully,

Peter Dsouza

Word Count: 173

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Overall Band Score

5.5

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B2 - Upper Intermediate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

football: 3

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Task Response

The letter addresses all parts of the task effectively. You have introduced yourself, detailed your relevant experience and skills (both coaching and playing), and clearly stated your availability. The tone is appropriate for a job application. To improve and reach a higher band, ensure better grammatical precision in complex sentences (e.g., 'I myself the winner' should be 'I myself am the winner' or 'I am a winner') and refine some phrasing to sound more natural (e.g., 'In this prospect' is not the correct idiom; 'With this in mind' or 'Regarding my availability' would be better). Additionally, ensure there is a space between the month and the date.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter follows a logical structure, addressing all parts of the prompt in separate paragraphs. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and mechanical (e.g., starting multiple sentences with 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', 'Additionally'). To improve, try to use more natural transitions or combine sentences to create a smoother flow. Some phrasing, such as 'In this prospect', is used incorrectly and disrupts the logical progression.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is adequate for the task and allows the reader to understand the message. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choices and awkward phrasing, such as 'with regard in response to' and 'I myself the winner'. To reach a higher band, aim for more sophisticated collocations and ensure that formal expressions are used accurately (e.g., instead of 'ask any question', use 'contact me if you require further information').

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

There are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally hinder the clarity of the message. Issues include missing verbs ('I myself the winner'), incorrect preposition usage ('since last 10 years' should be 'for the last 10 years'), and errors in verb patterns ('looking forward to hear' should be 'looking forward to hearing'). While you attempt a variety of structures, the accuracy is not consistent enough to support a higher score. Focus on mastering subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and prepositional phrases.

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