Band 4+: You are planning to move to a new city for work or study. You want to ask a friend who lives there for advice. Write a letter to your friend. - Explain why you are moving. - Ask for specific advice about finding accommodation. - Ask about social activities or places to meet people.

The letter addresses the main points: it explains the reason for moving (work transfer), mentions the timing (next week), and asks for help with accommodation. However, there are several lapses in clarity and accuracy. The request for help is vague - it mentions needing a hotel but does not clearly ask your friend to assist in finding accommodation. Some sentences are confusing or contain errors (e.g., 'I am also will', 'need to moving', 'the offer is that located in your city'). To improve, organize your letter into clear paragraphs, use more precise language, and explicitly state what kind of help you need (e.g., 'Could you help me find a rental apartment or suggest a good hotel?'). Also, proofread for grammatical accuracy and ensure the tone is consistently friendly and polite. The letter falls short of the required 150 words.

The letter has a clear overall structure with a greeting, body, and closing, but the flow of ideas is often disrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear connections. The purpose of the letter is understandable, but the sequence of information could be improved. For example, the reason for moving is explained, but the timing and the request for help are presented in a somewhat disjointed manner. To improve, use clear topic sentences for each paragraph and link ideas with cohesive devices such as 'also', 'however', 'therefore', and 'in addition'. Ensure each paragraph focuses on one main idea: the reason for moving, the timing, and the request for accommodation help.

The vocabulary used is basic and sometimes imprecise, which limits the clarity of the message. There are several word choice errors, such as 'I am also will' and 'corporate employed', and the phrase 'the hotel I will be best for me' is awkward. To improve, expand your range of vocabulary and use more precise terms. For example, instead of 'work purpose', say 'for work-related reasons' or 'due to a job transfer'. Instead of 'good accommodation', use 'suitable housing' or 'comfortable living arrangements'. Also, use more natural collocations, such as 'find a place to live' or 'secure temporary accommodation'.

The letter contains numerous grammatical errors that significantly affect readability. There are issues with verb tense and form (e.g., 'I am also will', 'need to moving'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and periods. To improve, focus on writing complete, correct sentences. For example, 'I am also will' should be 'I am also well' or 'I am also fine'. 'I am moving to in your city' should be 'I am moving to your city'. 'need to moving' should be 'I need to move'. Review basic grammar rules, especially verb tenses and prepositions, and practice writing shorter, clearer sentences to reduce errors.