Letter

Band 6+: You recently stayed at a friend's house while they were away and accidentally broke a valuable vase. Write a letter to your friend, apologizing for the damage. You should include: - How the damage occurred - Why you feel so bad about the incident - What steps you will take to rectify the situation.

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Dear Haris,

I hope this email finds you well. I am writing to express my sorrow for accidentally breaking your expensive vase during my stay at your place last week.

I humbly apologize for the inconvinence it may have caused. I am fully ashamed of my action. The accident happend because it was placed in a blind spot, while standing up after the dinner from table, I could not see it standing in my way. The pain in your mother eyes still breaks my heart, indeed it was very dear to her as she told me it was a gift from your late grandmother. The damage which I have caused is unbearable but please accept my sincere apology regarding this matter. As a token of love, I am sending you a flower vase similar to the previous one. I hope your mother will like it.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Best regards.

Mah Noor Hassan.

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Overall Band Score

6.5

(+/- 0.5)

Vocabulary Complexity:
A2 - Upper Beginner
Consider using more varied and advanced words.

Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:
No noticeable repetition! Great job!

Task Response

The letter adequately addresses all parts of the task, including an apology, explanation, and suggestion for compensation. The tone is appropriately apologetic. To improve, focus on conciseness and avoid overly emotional language. For example, phrases like "fully ashamed" and "pain in your mother's eyes still breaks my heart" could be toned down for a more professional tone suitable for the General Training context.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter is generally coherent and the message is clear. However, the organization could be improved for better flow. Consider grouping related ideas together more explicitly. For example, the explanation of how the vase broke could be more detailed and separated from the expressions of remorse. Also, avoid overly dramatic language, which can detract from the overall clarity.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary used is adequate and appropriate for the task. Phrases like 'express my sorrow' and 'blind spot' are well-chosen. However, there's room to enhance the lexical range by using more varied and precise language. For instance, instead of 'fully ashamed of my action,' you could use a more nuanced expression. Also, be careful with spelling ('inconvinence').

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter demonstrates a reasonable range of grammatical structures, but there are noticeable errors that affect clarity. For example, the sentence 'The accident happend because it was placed in a blind spot, while standing up after the dinner from table, I could not see it standing in my way' is grammatically awkward and could be restructured for better readability. Pay closer attention to sentence structure, verb tense consistency, and correct use of articles and prepositions. Proofreading carefully before submission can help catch these errors.

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