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Band 5+: You recently stayed at a friend's house while they were away and accidentally broke a valuable vase. Write a letter to your friend, apologizing for the damage. You should include: - How the damage occurred - Why you feel so bad about the incident - What steps you will take to rectify the situation.

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Dear Simran,

I am writing this letter to apologize for the vase I accidentally broke during my stay at your house while you were away on vacations. I am truly sorry for my mistake as I know the vase held a place in your heart as it was a gift from your aunt.

Firstly I would like to explain how it happened as this was during night time and I woke up for a glass of water and it was pitch black and I hit the table because I was half asleep and the vase fell from the table.

Furthermore, I am deeply regretful because this vase meant so much to you beyond from the monetory value as this was a souviner your aunt bought from a antique shop in Italy and it was really a piece of history apart from just being a decorative peice.

I sincerely hope you will forgive me for this and I am currently looking for a same vase and I have found the antique dealer online and I am constantly in touch with them and they have assured me they will be able to find the exact same one.

Yours Truly,

Akshit

Word Count: 198

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Overall Band Score

5.5

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B1 - Intermediate
Using more sophisticated words could be beneficial.

Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:
No noticeable repetition! Great job!

Task Response

The letter appropriately addresses all requirements of the task, providing details about how the vase was broken, expressing remorse, and offering compensation. The tone is suitable, and the letter is well-organized. To improve, consider adding more specific details to enhance the explanation and the compensation offer. For example, you could mention a specific amount you are willing to pay if a replacement cannot be found.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter is generally coherent, but the organization could be improved for better flow. Consider using more varied cohesive devices to link ideas within and between paragraphs. For example, in the second paragraph, the transition to explaining how the vase broke could be smoother. In the third paragraph, the connection between the vase's sentimental value and your regret could be more explicitly linked.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, but there's room to enhance it with more precise and varied word choices. For instance, instead of repeatedly using 'sorry' and 'mistake,' explore synonyms like 'remorseful,' 'apologies,' or 'oversight.' While the phrase 'held a place in your heart' is appropriate, varying such expressions can elevate the letter. Also, 'monetory' should be 'monetary,' and 'souviner' should be 'souvenir.'

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains grammatical errors that affect clarity. For example, in the second paragraph, 'as this was during night time' could be rephrased for better clarity. In the third paragraph, 'beyond from the monetory value' is grammatically incorrect and should be revised. Also, 'a antique shop' should be 'an antique shop,' and 'decorative peice' should be 'decorative piece.' Pay close attention to verb tense consistency and correct article usage throughout the letter.

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