Band 5+: you should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The report adequately covers the main features of both charts, highlighting the dominant categories (donated food and program services) and providing a clear overall summary. It includes relevant comparisons and mentions the total amounts. However, there are a few minor omissions and lapses: the 'Other Income' category is not mentioned, and there is a slight inaccuracy in the percentage for donated food (86.4% instead of 86.6%). Additionally, some phrasing is awkward (e.g., 'fundrushing' instead of 'fundraising', and 'the other group is much smaller' could be more precise). To improve, ensure all categories are included and proofread for spelling and clarity. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a clear overall structure with an introduction, a paragraph on revenue, and a paragraph on expenditures. However, the flow is sometimes disrupted by awkward phrasing and missing transitions. For example, the phrase 'the other group is much smaller' is vague and does not clearly link to the preceding sentence. Additionally, the second paragraph begins with 'Looking first at revenue sources' which is appropriate, but the third paragraph starts abruptly with 'Regarding expenditure,' and the sentence structure is confusing. To improve, use more cohesive devices such as 'In contrast,' 'Similarly,' and 'Overall,' and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and logical progression.

The report uses some appropriate vocabulary for describing data, such as 'accounting for,' 'the largest proportion,' and 'made up the smallest proportion.' However, there are instances of imprecise word choice and repetition. For example, 'have equal percentage' should be 'had equal percentages,' and 'fundrushing' is a misspelling of 'fundraising.' The phrase 'the other group is much smaller' is vague and could be replaced with more specific language. To improve, expand your range of synonyms for describing proportions (e.g., 'constituted,' 'represented,' 'comprised') and ensure correct spelling and word forms.

The report contains several grammatical errors and punctuation issues that affect clarity. For instance, 'donated food was the main source of income, accounting for 86.4% the largest proportion' is missing a comma or conjunction before 'the largest proportion.' Also, 'Community contributions were second of income and have 10.4%' is awkward and should be 'Community contributions were the second source of income, accounting for 10.4%.' The sentence 'Regarding expenditure, accounts for the largest share program services 95.8%' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'Regarding expenditure, program services accounted for the largest share at 95.8%.' Additionally, there are missing commas and inconsistent use of articles. To improve, review subject-verb agreement, sentence structure, and punctuation. Practice writing more complex sentences with accurate grammar.