Band 4+: The main reasons why students choose a particular university in the UK

The report addresses the task by describing the main reasons for choosing a university and comparing the two years. It includes key data points and an overall trend. However, there are some inaccuracies and omissions: the percentages for quality of teaching and resources are not precisely stated, and the report incorrectly states that proximity to parental home grew by 12% (it actually grew by 12 percentage points, from 10% to 22%). Additionally, there are several spelling and grammatical errors (e.g., 'ilustrate', 'percents', 'growed', 'Conesquently', 'downgraded', 'chosed') that affect clarity. To improve, ensure accurate data representation, use correct terminology (e.g., 'percentage points'), and proofread for language errors. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a logical structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion, but the flow is disrupted by unclear referencing and abrupt transitions. For example, 'Conesquently there should be the most declining and its sports and other activities' is confusing and lacks clear connection to the previous sentence. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate. To improve, use clearer linking words (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Similarly') and ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'the most declining' and instead specify what is declining.

The vocabulary is adequate but limited in range and precision. There are several spelling errors (e.g., 'ilustrate', 'percents', 'Conesquently', 'growed', 'chosed') and awkward word choices (e.g., 'pupils' instead of 'students', 'thriving' instead of 'significant', 'downgraded' instead of 'decreased'). To improve, use a wider range of academic vocabulary (e.g., 'depict', 'percentage', 'consequently', 'increased', 'chosen') and ensure correct spelling. Also, avoid informal or imprecise terms like 'houses' for 'parental home'.

The report contains numerous grammatical errors that affect clarity and accuracy. Examples include subject-verb agreement ('hasnt changed' should be 'hasn't changed'), incorrect verb forms ('has growed' should be 'has grown', 'chosed' should be 'chosen'), and missing punctuation (e.g., missing commas after introductory phrases). The range of sentence structures is limited, with mostly simple sentences. To improve, practice using a variety of complex structures (e.g., relative clauses, conditionals) and review basic grammar rules for tense consistency and subject-verb agreement. Also, ensure correct use of articles and prepositions.