Band 4+: You should spent 20 minutes on this task The chart below gives information about how people aged 25_35 are housed in UK Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main feature and make comparison where relevant At least 150 words

The report addresses the main trends of the chart, specifically the decline in home ownership and the rise in renting. However, the response is somewhat underdeveloped and lacks the depth required for a higher score. To improve, ensure that you include more specific data points (actual percentages) to support your descriptions and avoid vague phrasing like 'increase drastic' or 'it is declined a half'. Additionally, try to group data more effectively to make comparisons more sophisticated. The overview is present, which is good, but the body paragraphs would benefit from more precise mathematical comparisons and a clearer structure. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report follows a basic structure with an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. However, the progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited, and some sentences are fragmented (e.g., the sentence starting with 'While a significant decrease...'). To improve, ensure that every sentence is a complete thought and use a wider variety of linking words such as 'In contrast,' 'Conversely,' or 'Subsequently' to connect your observations more smoothly.

The vocabulary is functional but repetitive and contains several spelling and word-form errors (e.g., 'Remters', 'Renter', 'increase drastic'). There is an attempt to use comparative language, but it lacks precision. To reach a higher band, aim to use more varied synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' (e.g., 'plummeted', 'surged', 'experienced a downward trend') and ensure that adjectives and adverbs are used correctly (e.g., 'drastic increase' instead of 'increase drastic'). Boost vocabulary complexity to elevate the overall score.

Grammatical errors are frequent and occasionally impede the reader's understanding. There are issues with verb tenses (e.g., 'it is declined', 'Renters shown'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. For example, 'it only more than 20%' lacks a verb. I recommend focusing on mastering basic sentence structures, particularly the use of the past simple tense for describing historical data, and ensuring that complex sentences are joined correctly using subordinating conjunctions.