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Band 6+: Your child school is organizing a week-long overseas trip and the principal is looking for parents to join as volunteer. write a letter to express your interest. In your letter explain- A.why you would like to join the trip? B. Ask some general question about the trip? C. describe how you can contribute is as a parent?

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Dear Sir,

I am writing to express my profond interest in atrip to India, organized by your school. In this tour, my 11-year-old daughter is also going to participate. This trip not only fosters our father-daughter bond, but also provides me a significant time to spend with her. In addition, I would be grateful if you could provide me details of schedule ,estimated participants, and the places where the participants are to going explore. As I have been working as an international tour guide for the last five years, I have a brief knowledge of several exotic locations of India. These insights could be beneficial to both the students and authorities, as I can voluntarily provide crucial assistance to all visitors. I look forward to your positive response.

Yours faithfully,

Sandesh Sitaula

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B2 - Upper Intermediate
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Vocabulary Repetition:
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Task Response

The letter appropriately addresses all requirements of the task, providing relevant and sufficient information regarding the writer's interest in joining the trip, questions about the trip, and how they can contribute. There are a few minor areas for improvement, such as elaborating slightly more on the specific contributions beyond general assistance. Also, the letter could benefit from a slightly more formal tone in certain phrases to better suit the recipient (the principal). Overall, it's a well-written response. The letter falls short of the required 150 words.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter is generally coherent, but the flow could be improved with better transitions between ideas. For example, when transitioning from expressing interest to asking questions, a clearer link could be established. Consider using transitional phrases to guide the reader more smoothly through your letter.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is adequate, but there's room to enhance it with more varied and precise word choices. For instance, instead of 'profond interest,' consider using 'keen interest' or 'strong interest.' Also, explore synonyms for words like 'significant' and 'crucial' to add depth to your writing.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

There are several grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the letter. For example, 'atrip' should be 'a trip,' and the sentence structure in the second paragraph could be improved for better readability. Pay close attention to articles, prepositions, and verb tenses to enhance grammatical accuracy.

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