Band 5+: Are historic buildings valued enough, or should they be replaced with modern structures?

Your pronunciation is above average. However, you may find complexity in certain words challenging. Regular practice should aid in improvement.

The response addresses both sides of the question but lacks a clear, cohesive stance. The initial part of the answer suggests a preference for modern buildings based on popularity and interest among children, which is a somewhat superficial argument for urban development. While the mention of historical buildings helping us learn about the past is a relevant point, the response relies too heavily on personal observations and specific examples from the speaker's own country. To improve, aim to discuss the topic in more general, societal terms. For instance, you could weigh the cultural value of heritage against the economic or functional benefits of modern infrastructure. Ensure that your position is clearly stated at the beginning to avoid ambiguity.

The response lacks a clear, decisive stance on the 'either/or' nature of the question. You spent a significant amount of time discussing why modern buildings are popular, which didn't directly answer whether they *should* replace historical ones. The coherence is weakened by the use of 'and' as a repetitive connector. To improve, use more sophisticated discourse markers like 'On the one hand,' 'Conversely,' or 'Ultimately' to weigh both sides of the argument before reaching a conclusion.

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive (e.g., using 'interesting' and 'buildings' multiple times). You attempted to describe complex ideas using 'illustrations' and 'inscribed words,' which is a good effort, but 'inscriptions' (as seen in the refined version) is the more precise term. To reach higher bands, try to use topic-specific vocabulary such as 'architectural heritage,' 'cultural identity,' 'urban development,' or 'aesthetic value.'

The grammatical structure is primarily composed of simple and compound sentences joined by 'and' or 'because.' There is a lack of complex sentence structures (e.g., conditional sentences or relative clauses) that are necessary for a high score in Part 3. While your grammar is generally understandable, it lacks the range and precision required for a Band 7 or above. Work on using structures like 'If we were to demolish these structures, we would lose...' to demonstrate higher-level control.