Band 4+: Should competitive sports prioritize entertainment value or the integrity of athletic achievement?

Your pronunciation is above average. However, you may find complexity in certain words challenging. Regular practice should aid in improvement.

The response addresses the core of the question by suggesting a balance between the two concepts; however, the development of the argument is somewhat tangential. The mention of 'purchasing different kinds of chemicals and useless things' is unclear and does not directly support the comparison between entertainment and athletic integrity. To improve, focus on explaining how entertainment (such as spectacle, marketing, or media coverage) might conflict with or complement the purity of competition. Additionally, ensure that the arguments remain focused on the societal or systemic level of sports rather than drifting into vague statements about personal consumption or general health benefits. Aim to expand on why one might be prioritized over the other to provide a more nuanced, academic response.

The speaker struggles to maintain a coherent flow of ideas. There is significant repetition of words (e.g., 'because', 'important') and the logical connection between 'purchasing chemicals' and the question of 'entertainment vs. integrity' is very weak and difficult to follow. To improve, use more sophisticated cohesive devices (e.g., 'On the one hand,' 'Conversely,' 'From a moral standpoint') rather than relying heavily on 'because.' Work on structuring your answer using the PEEL method (Point, Explanation, Example, Link).

The vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly in context. For example, using 'pupil' to refer to spectators or 'chemical' to describe sports issues is imprecise. The phrase 'clear play' is a literal translation that doesn't quite work; 'fair play' would be the appropriate collocation. To reach higher bands, you need to use topic-specific vocabulary such as 'sportsmanship,' 'commercialization,' 'spectacle,' or 'ethical standards.'

Grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, word forms (e.g., 'interesting' vs 'entertaining'), and sentence structure (e.g., 'every sports shoot athletic achievement'). The sentence 'despite to generate It's useful' is grammatically incoherent. Focus on mastering basic sentence structures and then gradually incorporate complex sentences using relative clauses and conditional structures.