Band 5+: Describe a successful businessperson you know You should say ●Who the person is ●How you knew the person ●What he/ she has achieved And explain why he/ she is successful.

Your pronunciation is average. It is understandable but not always accurate. Focusing on the rhythm and stress patterns of English could prove beneficial.

The response adequately addresses the prompt's requirements by identifying a successful businessperson, describing their work, and explaining their success. However, to improve, more details about the businessperson's achievements and the reasons for their success would enhance the response. Adding specific examples of challenges overcome and strategies employed would strengthen the answer and demonstrate a deeper understanding of the topic. The response could be expanded as it currently feels quite brief.

The answer is understandable, but the structure could be improved. There's a lack of smooth transitions between ideas. Adding more cohesive devices (e.g., 'Furthermore,' 'Moreover,' 'In addition') would enhance fluency and coherence. The description of the business could be more detailed and engaging.

The vocabulary is adequate but lacks precision and range. Words like 'containers' and 'supplies' are quite general. More specific vocabulary related to the business (e.g., types of goods transported, logistics, etc.) would improve the score. The phrase 'tried by himself' could be replaced with a more sophisticated expression like 'became an independent operator'.

The grammar contains some errors, particularly in sentence structure and tense consistency. For example, the use of 'tried' is ambiguous. More complex grammatical structures and accurate tense usage would improve the score. Proofreading would help eliminate minor grammatical errors.