Band 6+: How much time do children spend with their parents in your country?

Your pronunciation is above average. However, you may find complexity in certain words challenging. Regular practice should aid in improvement.

The answer is partially relevant to the question. While it touches upon the time children spend with their parents implicitly by contrasting it with time spent on mobile phones, it doesn't directly address the question of how much time children spend with their parents. Try to directly answer the question first, then expand on the related issues you mentioned.

The answer is understandable, but the structure could be improved. There's some rambling and repetition. Try to organize your thoughts into a clearer sequence. For example, you could start with a general statement about time spent with parents, then contrast it with time spent on devices, and finally conclude with the benefits of parent-child interaction and outdoor activities. Work on smoother transitions between ideas.

Vocabulary is adequate but lacks precision in places. Phrases like "different types of players" are unclear. Try to use more specific and accurate vocabulary to express your ideas. Consider using synonyms to avoid repetition of words like "children" and "mobile phone".

There are several grammatical errors, particularly in tense consistency ("When children was free...") and subject-verb agreement. Pay close attention to verb tenses and ensure your subjects agree with their verbs. Practice using a wider range of grammatical structures, such as complex sentences, to improve fluency and accuracy.