Band 5+: Why do you think some people prefer not to go abroad on holiday?

Your pronunciation is quite good. Working on consistency and tackling difficult sounds may enhance clarity.

The response addresses the core of the question by identifying financial constraints and personal preferences as reasons for not traveling abroad. However, the development is somewhat repetitive, particularly regarding the mention of money. To improve, avoid restating the same point multiple times (e.g., mentioning money three times in a short paragraph). Instead, use that space to expand on other potential reasons, such as language barriers, cultural fears, or health concerns. Additionally, ensure the conclusion remains focused on the 'why' rather than shifting to a personal opinion on whether people 'should' travel, as the question asks for causes rather than a recommendation.

The speaker demonstrates a basic ability to organize ideas using simple cohesive devices like 'the first reason' and 'additionally.' However, there is significant repetition of ideas (mentioning money multiple times in different ways) and a lack of progression. The response feels circular rather than developing a complex argument. To improve, avoid repeating the same point (money) three times; instead, use that space to introduce a second distinct category of reasons, such as cultural fears or language barriers.

The vocabulary is functional but limited. While 'frugal' and 'broaden their horizons' are good attempts at higher-level vocabulary, they are used in a somewhat repetitive context. Phrases like 'financial budget' are slightly redundant (a budget is inherently financial). To reach a higher band, try to use more precise collocations, such as 'prohibitive costs,' 'cultural apprehension,' or 'socio-economic constraints.'

There are several grammatical errors that affect the flow. For example, 'they may can afford' is grammatically incorrect (it should be 'they may not be able to afford' or 'they cannot afford'). The sentence structure is mostly simple or compound. To improve, work on complex sentence structures using relative clauses (e.g., 'People who are concerned about their finances often...') and ensure modal verbs are used correctly.