Band 5+: Bar chart (international graduates from UK universities in 2000 and 2015

The report addresses the task by describing the bar chart and comparing data from 2000 and 2015. However, there are several inaccuracies in the data (e.g., London 5% instead of 6% in 2000, 20% instead of 15% in 2015; Oxford 14% instead of 5% in 2000, 25% instead of 12% in 2015; Cambridge 15% instead of 10% in 2000, 23% instead of 25% in 2015; Cardiff 10% instead of 4% in 2000, 19% instead of 6% in 2015; Bristol 6% instead of 3% in 2000, 8% instead of 5% in 2015; Bath 7% instead of 3% in 2000, 12% instead of 9% in 2015). These errors detract from the accuracy of the response. The overall structure is present, but the inclusion of incorrect figures in key areas affects the task achievement. To improve, ensure data is reported accurately from the visual information, and avoid making up numbers. Also, correct spelling (e.g., 'Exford' to 'Oxford', 'thed' to 'the', 'nimber' to 'number') and grammar for clarity. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a basic structure with an introduction and an overall trend statement, but the flow of information is disrupted by unclear referencing and inconsistent data presentation. The use of cohesive devices is limited, and some sentences are poorly connected, making the message harder to follow. To improve, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a clear set of data points and use linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'similarly') to guide the reader smoothly through the comparisons.

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks range and precision. There are some errors in word choice (e.g., 'Exford' instead of 'Oxford', 'nimber' instead of 'number') and repetition of basic terms like 'increased' and 'rose'. To achieve a higher score, use a wider variety of synonyms (e.g., 'surged', 'climbed', 'peaked') and ensure all city names and data points are accurately described. Avoid informal phrasing like 'Following the same trend' without clear connection.

The report contains several grammatical errors and awkward phrasings that affect clarity, such as 'thed year', 'graduates nimber', and incomplete sentences. While some complex structures are attempted, they are not always controlled. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and sentence completeness. Practice using a mix of simple and complex sentences with accurate punctuation to enhance readability.