Band 4+: The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for their years 1980 and 2015.

The report attempts to address the task by describing the data for the five countries, but it contains several inaccuracies and omissions. For example, it states that Australia had the largest percentage in both years, which is incorrect based on the data (Australia had 60% in 1980 and 58% in 2015, while the USA had 55% in 2015). The report also misses key details, such as the specific percentages for each country, and the description of trends is vague. To improve, focus on accurately reporting the data, including specific figures, and ensure that comparisons are clear and correct. Additionally, avoid informal language and grammatical errors, and structure the report with a clear overview and detailed paragraphs. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report lacks a clear overall structure and logical progression of ideas. The introduction is incomplete and does not clearly state the main trend or purpose. The body paragraphs are not well-organized, and the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes incorrect. To improve, consider using a clear introduction that paraphrases the task, followed by an overview of key trends, and then detailed paragraphs comparing the data. Use linking words and phrases such as 'in contrast', 'similarly', and 'overall' to improve flow.

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with limited range. There are several inaccuracies and informal expressions (e.g., 'huge amount of increase', 'the same', 'grew twice'). To improve, use a wider range of academic vocabulary related to trends (e.g., 'rose significantly', 'remained stable', 'experienced a dramatic increase'). Avoid informal language and ensure correct word forms (e.g., 'percentage' instead of 'amount').

The report contains numerous grammatical errors, including incorrect verb tenses, missing articles, subject-verb agreement issues, and punctuation mistakes. Sentences are often incomplete or run-on. To improve, focus on writing complete sentences with correct subject-verb agreement and appropriate tense usage. Practice using a variety of sentence structures, such as complex and compound sentences, and ensure correct punctuation (e.g., capital letters, commas, periods).