Band 5+: The chart shows the number of patients welcomed by various hospitals in a particular city in 2012.

The report addresses the main trends and provides a comparison between the hospitals, which is required for the task. However, there are several inaccuracies in data reporting that affect the clarity of the response. For instance, the report incorrectly identifies Hospital B as having 10,500 patients at the start, whereas that figure actually belongs to Hospital C. Additionally, the description of trends is somewhat inconsistent; while the overview mentions an upward trend for Hospital B, the body paragraph describes a downward trend. To improve, ensure that data points are accurately attributed to the correct categories and that the overview is strictly consistent with the details provided in the body paragraphs. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report lacks essential punctuation, such as periods and commas, which makes it very difficult to follow the progression of ideas. The absence of sentence boundaries results in 'run-on' sentences, particularly in the overview and body paragraphs. To improve, ensure that every complete thought is separated by a full stop and use commas to separate clauses or items in a list. Additionally, while you attempt to use cohesive devices like 'Thereafter' and 'Finally', the lack of punctuation prevents them from functioning effectively.

You have used some appropriate vocabulary for describing trends, such as 'upward trend', 'contrasting pattern', and 'emerged as the leading category'. However, there are several errors in word choice and article usage (e.g., 'an downward trend' instead of 'a downward trend', and 'an descending trend' instead of 'a descending trend'). Try to vary your vocabulary more by using synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' and ensure that the articles (a/an) match the following sound.

Grammatical accuracy is a significant issue in this report. There are several instances of missing verbs (e.g., 'how many patients [were] welcomed') and subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'the number of A increase' should be 'increased'). The lack of punctuation is the most critical error, as it fundamentally disrupts the grammatical structure of the text. Focus on mastering basic sentence structures and the use of past tense, as the data refers to a completed period in 2012.