Band 4+: The diagrams below show changes in Felixstone in the UK between 1967 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The report addresses the task by describing the main changes between 1967 and 2001, and it makes some comparisons. However, there are several inaccuracies and omissions. For instance, the report mentions a car park that is not in the visual description, and it incorrectly states that the farmland was shifted to tennis courts and swimming pool, whereas the description indicates these were new additions. Additionally, the report omits key features such as the shopping mall, the pool, and the renaming of the pier to public beach. The language is somewhat unclear with spelling and grammatical errors (e.g., 'Felistone', 'diferent', 'improvment', 'convience'), which affect clarity. To improve, focus on accurately reporting the main changes, avoid introducing unmentioned details, and ensure the report is clearly written and well-organized. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a basic structure with an introduction and an overview, but the organization of information is somewhat unclear. The progression from the overall statement to specific details is not always logical, and the use of cohesive devices is limited. To improve, clearly separate the overview from the detailed description, and use a range of linking words (e.g., 'in addition', 'furthermore', 'whereas') to connect ideas smoothly. Also, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a distinct aspect of the maps (e.g., top half vs. bottom half) to enhance clarity.

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, but there are several inaccuracies and limited range. Words like 'commercialised', 'urbanised', and 'convience facilities' show an attempt to use appropriate terms, but spelling errors ('convience', 'hight', 'cost line') and awkward phrasing ('after huge time gap', 'improvment for living environment') detract from precision. To improve, use a wider range of precise vocabulary (e.g., 'transformed', 'expanded', 'relocated', 'replaced') and ensure correct spelling. Also, avoid informal or vague expressions and aim for more formal, academic language.

The report contains numerous grammatical errors and punctuation issues that affect readability. For example, 'a Felistone in two diferent period of time that divided in 1967 and in 2001' is unclear and contains errors in article use, pluralization, and verb form. There are also sentence fragments and missing punctuation (e.g., 'it used to be agricultural place' should be 'It used to be an agricultural place'). To improve, focus on using a variety of sentence structures (simple, compound, complex) with accurate grammar. Proofread carefully to correct errors in subject-verb agreement, articles, prepositions, and capitalization. Practicing writing clear, concise sentences will help enhance accuracy.