Band 4+: The diagrams below show the plan of a small school in 1980 and in 2010.

The report addresses the main changes between the two plans, such as the expansion of the building, the increase in seminar rooms, the removal of trees, and the addition of a car park and new building. However, there are some inaccuracies and unclear descriptions (e.g., 'in 200' instead of 2010, 'accomodation' instead of 'building', and the office being 'widened' when it was likely expanded or relocated). The structure is generally logical, but the language is often imprecise and contains grammatical errors that affect clarity. To improve, focus on using accurate terminology, ensuring correct time references, and providing a clearer, more coherent overview of the key changes. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a clear overall structure with an introduction and an overview, but the flow of ideas is often disrupted by unclear referencing and abrupt transitions. For example, the phrase 'instead of three seminar rooms, in 2010 there is five seminar rooms' is confusing, and the shift from discussing the main building to the outside areas is not smooth. The final paragraph introduces the office without a clear connection to the previous content. To improve, use clear topic sentences for each paragraph and ensure that each paragraph focuses on a distinct aspect of the changes (e.g., main building, external areas, and specific rooms). Additionally, use cohesive devices such as 'in contrast', 'furthermore', and 'while' to link ideas more effectively.

The report uses some appropriate vocabulary related to maps and changes (e.g., 'illustrates', 'reconstruction', 'expanded', 'relocated'), but there are several inaccuracies and repetitions. For instance, 'coridor' is misspelled, 'accomodation' is used incorrectly (likely meaning 'building' or 'facility'), and 'amenity' is used vaguely. The phrase 'more amenity as a car park' is awkward. To improve, use a wider range of precise vocabulary, such as 'extended', 'converted', 'replaced', 'facility', and 'entrance'. Also, ensure correct spelling and word choice to enhance clarity and sophistication.

The report contains numerous grammatical errors and punctuation issues that significantly affect clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement ('there is five seminar rooms' should be 'there are five seminar rooms'), incorrect tense usage ('in 200 there is no trees anymore' should be 'by 2010, the trees had been removed'), and incomplete or run-on sentences. The phrase 'Thr office are widened' is grammatically incorrect. To improve, focus on using a variety of sentence structures, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for basic errors. Practice writing complex sentences with accurate subordinate clauses to demonstrate greater grammatical control.