Band 4+: The graph below describes the use of fixed telephone lines, mobile phones, and internet between 1994 and 2005 in China. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The report addresses the task by describing the overall trend and some key data points. However, there are several inaccuracies and omissions. For instance, the initial value for fixed telephone lines is stated as 50 million in 1994, but the data shows 20 million. The peak for mobile phones is correctly identified as 450 million, but the starting point is not clearly stated. The internet data is inaccurately described as reaching 200 million, whereas the actual figure is 185 million. Additionally, the report lacks a clear comparison between the categories and does not mention the convergence of fixed lines and mobile phones at 250 million in 2001, which is a key feature. The language is sometimes unclear (e.g., 'more common popular choices') and contains grammatical errors. To improve, ensure accurate data representation, include all key trends and comparisons, and use clearer, more precise language. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a clear overall structure with an introduction and an overview, but the body paragraphs lack clear organization and logical progression. The ideas are presented in a somewhat disjointed manner, and the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate (e.g., 'Similarly' and 'By contrast' are used inappropriately). The message is not always easy to follow due to unclear referencing and abrupt transitions. To improve, organize the information into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific trend or category, and use a wider range of linking words and referencing to ensure smooth flow.

The report uses a limited range of vocabulary, with some repetition (e.g., 'users', 'increased', 'popular'). There are attempts to use more sophisticated terms (e.g., 'converged', 'lags behind'), but some are used inaccurately or inappropriately (e.g., 'more common popular choices'). The lexical choices are not always precise, and there is a lack of variety in describing trends. To improve, expand your vocabulary for describing changes (e.g., 'rose steadily', 'experienced a surge', 'plateaued') and use synonyms to avoid repetition. Ensure that word choices are accurate and natural in context.

The report contains numerous grammatical errors and punctuation issues that affect clarity. There are problems with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people who use fixed telephones line were'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'it reached the peak to'), missing articles (e.g., 'the use of the internet remained stable by 1995'), and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'the users of mobile phones were less popular initially it reached the peak'). The range of sentence structures is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty. To improve, focus on grammar accuracy, particularly in verb tenses and sentence construction. Practice writing clear, error-free sentences and use a variety of structures, such as relative clauses and passive voice, where appropriate.