Band 4+: The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The report addresses the task by presenting an overview and some comparisons between perceived and actual crime likelihoods. However, there are several inaccuracies in the data (e.g., burglary perceived at 15% instead of 23%, car crime actual at 5% instead of 7-8%, violent crime perceived at 15% instead of 19-20%). Additionally, some trends are incorrectly described (e.g., car crime perceived dropped to 17% instead of 21%, violent crime actual is said to stay the same but actually increased). The report also contains spelling and grammatical errors (e.g., 'actuall', 'vcitim', 'burgalary', 'occupies'). To improve, ensure data is accurately reported, use precise language, and proofread for errors. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a clear overall structure with an introduction and a general trend statement, but the organization of details is somewhat confusing. The paragraphs are not clearly separated, and the progression from one crime type to the next is not always logical. Cohesive devices are limited and sometimes misused (e.g., 'Thereafter', 'Consequently'), which makes the text less fluid. To improve, use clear paragraphing for each crime category and employ a wider range of linking words and referencing to enhance the flow.

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with limited range. There are several spelling errors (e.g., 'actuall', 'vcitim', 'burgalary') and imprecise word choices (e.g., 'perceived of burgalary', 'actual remain the same'). The report would benefit from using more precise and varied vocabulary, such as 'perception', 'likelihood', 'fluctuate', 'remain stable', and 'approximately'. Ensure correct spelling and word forms to improve lexical accuracy. Boost vocabulary complexity to elevate the overall score.

The report contains numerous grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that hinder clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, prepositions, articles, and sentence structure (e.g., 'probability perceived in both time and every type of the crime more than actual likelihood'). Punctuation is also inconsistent (e.g., missing commas, incorrect use of periods). To improve, focus on constructing grammatically correct sentences, using a variety of complex structures, and proofreading for punctuation and accuracy.