Band 4+: The pie charts below show the comparison of exports in Great Britian over five years

The report identifies some key features and provides some data, but it lacks a comprehensive overview and sufficient detail. The analysis is somewhat superficial, and there are some inaccuracies in the data reported. To improve, focus on providing a more thorough and accurate description of the data, including more specific comparisons and trends. Also, ensure that the overview is a clear and concise summary of the main points. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report lacks a clear structure and logical flow. The introduction is adequate, but the body paragraphs jump between different categories without a clear focus. The overall summary is weak and doesn't effectively highlight the main trends. To improve coherence, organize the report by comparing each category (Machinery, Vehicles, etc.) between the two years, or by discussing the major changes first and then the minor ones. Use transition words to connect ideas and ensure a smooth flow between sentences and paragraphs.

The vocabulary used is somewhat limited and lacks precision. There are instances of vague language (e.g., 'transactions,' 'segments,' 'minor changes'). To enhance lexical resource, use more specific and varied vocabulary related to exports and percentages. For example, instead of 'rate,' consider using 'percentage' or 'proportion.' Instead of 'minor changes,' try 'slight fluctuations' or 'marginal increases/decreases.' Use synonyms to avoid repetition and demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary.

The report contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity. There are issues with verb tense ('beeing' should be 'being'), article usage ('the United Kingdom' is generally correct, but context matters), and sentence structure. The sentence 'Five years later, pharmaceuticals decreased significantly, considering just less than one fifth, while the amount of vehicle export, increased only with 1%.' is particularly awkward and contains multiple errors. To improve grammatical accuracy, carefully proofread the report for errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure. Consider using a grammar checker to identify and correct errors, but always review the suggestions critically.