Band 4+: The table below gives information about the employment rates and the average annual salaries of new graduates in an Australian University in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.

The report addresses the task by presenting the main data points and making some comparisons. However, there are several inaccuracies and omissions that detract from the overall clarity. For instance, the employment rate for Arts is stated as 70% instead of 72%, and the salary for Science is incorrectly described as '43%' instead of '$43,000'. Additionally, the report lacks a clear overview or summary of the main trends, which is a key requirement for a high-scoring response. To improve, ensure all figures are accurately reported, include a clear overview sentence that highlights the highest and lowest values or notable comparisons, and avoid informal language such as 'upto' and 'get'. Organize the information logically, perhaps by grouping fields with similar characteristics, and use more precise vocabulary to describe data trends. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a logical structure, but the flow is disrupted by unclear referencing and abrupt transitions. For example, the phrase 'the health worker' is vague, and the comparison between fields is not consistently developed. To improve, use clear subject references (e.g., 'graduates in Health') and link ideas with cohesive devices such as 'in contrast', 'similarly', or 'while'. Organize the information into clear paragraphs, perhaps one for the highest figures and another for the lowest, to enhance readability.

The vocabulary is adequate but limited, with some imprecise word choices (e.g., 'job rates' instead of 'employment rates', 'mean annual income' is acceptable but 'average annual salaries' is more precise). There is repetition of 'employment rate' and 'salary', and some phrases are awkward (e.g., 'the least ratio of income and employent'). To improve, use a wider range of synonyms (e.g., 'remuneration', 'earnings', 'proportion of employed graduates') and ensure word forms are correct (e.g., 'employment' not 'employent'). Boost vocabulary complexity to elevate the overall score.

The report contains several grammatical errors and punctuation issues that affect clarity. For example, 'an university' should be 'a university', 'the health worker' should be 'graduates in Health', and 'they get the salary upto 43%' is incorrect (should be '$43,000'). There are also run-on sentences and missing commas. To improve, proofread carefully, use a variety of sentence structures (e.g., complex sentences with 'while' or 'whereas'), and ensure subject-verb agreement and correct prepositions.