Band 5+: The table below shows the average daily temperatures and the number of rainy days in five cities over the course of a year. City Average Temperature (°C) Number of Rainy Days London 12.5 160 Tokyo 15.2 120 New York 10.1 200 Sydney 18.3 90 Mexico City 22.0 50

The report addresses the task by presenting the main data and identifying a general trend. However, it contains some inaccuracies and unclear statements, such as the claim that London is warmer than New York (which is true) but then incorrectly stating that London has more rain than New York (it does not). The report also makes a broad generalization about temperature and rainy days that is not fully supported by the data. To improve, focus on accurately describing the data without overgeneralizing, and ensure all comparisons are correct. Organize the information more clearly, perhaps by grouping cities or highlighting the highest and lowest values for each category.

The report has a logical structure, but the flow is sometimes disrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear references. The introduction and body paragraphs are present, but the connection between ideas could be smoother. For example, the phrase 'From the data above, it shows that' is repetitive and could be replaced with more varied cohesive devices. Additionally, the final paragraph introduces a comparison that is not fully developed, and the sentence 'It also supported by the number of rain that London is more raining than Tokyo, Sydney, and New York City' is confusing and lacks clarity. To improve, use a clear topic sentence for each paragraph and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one. Also, avoid repeating the same linking phrases and instead use a range of cohesive devices such as 'in contrast', 'similarly', and 'as can be seen'.

The report uses some appropriate vocabulary related to the task, such as 'average temperature', 'rainy days', and 'lowest/highest'. However, there are several instances of imprecise or informal word choices, such as 'celcius' (should be 'Celsius'), 'being the lowest' (should be 'which is the lowest'), and 'more raining' (should be 'rainier' or 'has more rain'). The range of vocabulary is limited, and there is repetition of phrases like 'From the data above'. To improve, use a wider range of synonyms and more precise academic language. For example, instead of 'rain days', use 'days of rainfall' or 'precipitation days'. Also, ensure correct spelling and word forms, such as 'Celsius' and 'warmer'.

The report contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity and accuracy. For example, 'it shows that the higher the average temperature, it will give a lower number of rainy days' is a run-on and awkwardly constructed. Also, 'New York has 10.1 celcius, being the lowest average temperature between five cities' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'New York has 10.1°C, which is the lowest average temperature among the five cities.' Additionally, 'London average temperatures is being warmer than in New York' is incorrect; it should be 'London's average temperature is warmer than New York's.' The sentence 'It also supported by the number of rain that London is more raining than Tokyo, Sydney, and New York City' is ungrammatical and unclear. To improve, focus on sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and correct use of comparative forms. Practice writing clear, concise sentences and proofread to eliminate errors.