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Band 4+: You are looking for a part-time job and noticed a vacancy for a sales assistant at a clothing store. Write a letter to the store manager applying for the position. You should include details about: - which position you are applying for - your relevant skills and experience - when you can start the job

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my name is tabi i was interested insceals your job because i need to learn skils how is it to work when you have hard situation in your life . your electronic store is nearby to my new temporary house , and i like jobs being like a assistant because you are not getting bored of sitting in one place, additionaly i need to improve my skils how to make a conversation with other people .

i recently haved an a experience working at shops it was a phone case shop , i was working like a delivrer , about my skils i have a good memory, i’m not being late to work because my parents growth me like a responsible child , not taking a weekend for parties like it doing majority of the teenagers .

i have a lot of available time to come for an interview , because of summer weekends for 3 months , i can come to a interview every time you want except of the saturday

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Vocabulary Complexity:
C1 - Intricate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

because: 4

skils: 3

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Task Response

The letter addresses the task but contains several inaccuracies and irrelevant details. The purpose is clear, but the language is informal and contains errors. To improve, focus on clear structure, formal tone, and relevant content. Avoid irrelevant personal details and ensure each bullet point is fully addressed with specific examples.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter lacks clear paragraphing and logical flow. Ideas are presented in a single block without clear separation. The message is difficult to follow due to disjointed sentences and lack of cohesive devices. Consider organizing the letter into distinct paragraphs: one for interest, one for skills/experience, and one for availability. Use linking words like 'firstly', 'in addition', 'moreover' to improve coherence.

Lexical Resource

Vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly (e.g., 'sceals', 'skils', 'delivrer', 'growth'). There is repetition of basic words and phrases. To improve, expand your vocabulary by learning job-related terms (e.g., 'customer service', 'inventory management', 'communication skills'). Use a dictionary to check spelling and word forms.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

There are frequent grammatical errors, including incorrect verb tenses ('haved'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Punctuation is missing or misused. Focus on basic grammar rules: use past tense for past experiences, ensure subject-verb agreement, and practice writing complete sentences. Consider using shorter, simpler sentences to reduce errors.

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