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Band 5+: You are planning a surprise birthday party for a friend who is moving to a new city soon. Write a letter to your friend's neighbour asking for help in organizing the party. You should include details about: - why you are planning a surprise party - what kind of help you need from the neighbour - when and where the party will be held.

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Dear Sadithi,

I’m writing this to you reagrding Amaya’s 20th birthday. I remember last year she was so upset that her mother was not around, therefore I planned something special for her on this birthday. And the speciality of the party will be her mother, she will come back from Dubai on her birthday but Amaya won’t know. So, it’s up to you to taking out her on that day till I prepare the decorations and other stuff. So, you have to take care of the part her to not knowing until the surprise. Therefore, you have to keep the secret away from her without messing up this thoughtful plan. Let’s meet up soon before the day and discuss everything in person for more clarification.

Regards,

Tishara.

Word Count: 127

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B1 - Intermediate
Using more sophisticated words could be beneficial.

Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

birthday: 3

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Task Response

The letter addresses the task by explaining the surprise party plan, requesting the roommate's help, and emphasizing the need for secrecy. However, the letter could benefit from more specific details about how the roommate can assist with preparations and concrete strategies for maintaining the surprise. Also, the tone could be more persuasive and enthusiastic to encourage the roommate's full cooperation. The letter falls short of the required 150 words.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter's organization could be improved for better clarity. Consider using more explicit transitions between ideas to guide the reader. For example, when transitioning from explaining the party plan to requesting assistance, a phrase like 'To make this surprise a success...' would help. Additionally, breaking the letter into shorter paragraphs would enhance readability.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is generally adequate, but there's room to enhance it with more precise and varied word choices. For instance, instead of 'taking out her on that day,' you could use 'ensuring she is away from the house that day.' Also, phrases like 'keep the secret away from her' could be refined to 'maintain the secrecy of the event.'

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

Grammatical errors are present and impact the clarity of the message. Focus on improving sentence structure and accuracy in verb tense usage. For example, 'reagrding' should be 'regarding,' and 'taking out her' should be rephrased for grammatical correctness. Proofreading carefully for these types of errors will improve your writing.

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